Falling to the ground, it lands with a discernible “splat.” Initially, he thinks it’s a bird, but it lacks feathers or a beak. Realization dawns on him as it quivers – broken and bleeding. He feels emptiness inside.
She walks away; unconcerned after having just ripped his heart from his chest.
(Image by Lucretious of Freeimages.com)
Powerful truth flow in ur words. Great piece!…. 😊
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Thank you, my sweetest friend! Here’s a “pizza” my heart. 🍕 😀
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Anytm darling!!!😂😂😂😂😂
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Ha ha ha. Ouch! I guess he’s heart broken now. 💔
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😀 😀 Ah, What fun this story was! — I’m happy you saw the humor in it. xo
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Ouch! that hurts…
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Sorry about that, Francis! 😀
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😀
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Wonderful expressions – it evokes past agonies
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Past agonies? Yes, I think we all can relate to this story in some form. Thank you!
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that hidden part of this post is wonderful..wonderful one..:)
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Hi Voice! Long time no hear 🙂 Thank you so much!
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I was pre occupied and tangled with some of my personal issues,missed reading words though..hope your doing well..😊
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Well, I’m glad you’ve surfaced again! I’m doing great, thank you, dear friend. 🙂
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Beautiful Rumnager😊
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Thanks Sumit! Good to see you… you strike a thoughtful pose with your hand on your chin. 🙂
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Hahah.. Really?
Even I like your new Gravtaar look😉😉
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Ah, thank you, Sir Sumit 🙂
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Heheh.. No need of Sir Sumit 😉
Just, Sumit😊😅
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Thank you Just Sumit. 🙂
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Hahahahahhahaa😂😂😂😂😂😂
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You’re so funny😂😂
Hey, are you active on Instagram or Facebook? 🙂
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😀 No, sorry! 😦 Just WordPress.
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Okay. 🙂
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Oh la, la..that is painful indeed. Rose..y’r a star, shining so brightly in an otherwise dark and dingy cosmos.
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Aw, if I’m a star, you’re the sun! 🌞 Thank you, Paula. xo
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Reblogged this on Crazy Pasta Child.
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Thank you, Penney!
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Hearts are so overrated.
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Well, it’s hard to rate a heart when you don’t have one, Slash… I was talking about me 😉
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Oh dear. I hope that was a figurative “ripping out of the heart and dropping it onto the ground.” A literal one is going to be so much harder to bounce back from. 😦
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Figurative meanings ruin all the fun! Let’s make this one literal — yeah!!! 😀
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Gulp! 🙂
(I don’t know how to do a scared face on WordPress, so I had to do a smiling one.)
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😀
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Heartless Rose.
I’m heartless.
A super piece of flash fiction. 💔
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Well, if you’re heartless, you can never get hurt — maybe that’s not such a bad thing 😉 Thank you, my darkest friend. ❤
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Damn this was so good. I have tried to write these micro shorts, but I haven’t been able to pen one to my satisfaction. Good work.
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Ahhhh, 50-word stories are so MUCH fun to write… just cut away all the fat from your story, and you’re left with prime meat. Do it! A million thanks. xo
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I will try.
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Very evocative – love it!
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Thank you, ma belle 😀 ❤
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This story has another story behind it, and that has made it all the more interesting and powerful. So many things said, so many emotions….with so few words…. 🙂 Great one, Rose…
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Oh, you make me sigh with delight, Mani! Thanks so MUCH. ❥ ツ ღ ☻
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❤
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Wow, you can say so much with so little. Excellent, Rose. Poor guy, he never saw it coming.
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No, he didn’t 😦 We all have felt our heart crushed at some point, but we’re the stronger for it, I hope. Thank you, Dorinda. 💋
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Very true, on both parts. We live, we learn ❤
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Great one Rose
Just enough to stop and make me think
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He turns away from the heart and starts walking slowly. A passerby calls out: “Hey, buddy! Cleanup after your dog!”
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Wow! So much told in so few words. Great work, Rose.
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Thank you Cathy!
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Oh dear.
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I can’t find the hidden bit
cool though 😀
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The hidden bit?
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Dunno, someone said in a comment
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Hmm. Perhaps they meant the twist at the end?
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Huh maybe haha 😀
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Such a feeling and you’ve captured it wonderfully. The worst of it being that when it happens it is so shocking that you have those few blessed seconds before you feel the agony.
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Thank you!! Exactly! Nicely stated, Merrie. 💓
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Beautifully expressed! So poignant.
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Thank you Iris!
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You’re welcome. 🙂
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