50 Word Story – Cold Shoulder
She was turned away from him, and he felt her distance. He closed the gap between them, reached out, and caressed her cheek. No response.
He felt anger welling up inside. “You wouldn’t be here without me!”
He was being childish, but how was he to reach her?
Pygmalion wept.
*In Ovid’s poem Metamorphoses, Pygmalion was a sculptor who fell in love with a statue he had created.
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Classical and classy scene, executed with keen economy. Not a word wasted. Yay Rose
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I can say the same about your comment, Nick. Thank you! xo
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You stuck several chords of my heart, all at once. This was a great one. Kudos!
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All at once? How wonderful! I still want your talking pillow, though 😀 Thank you!! xo
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Haha. I’ll give it to you soon! 😀
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Hey, I actually remember that legend! Poor sod that he was.
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Yes, but if you remember, Aphrodite made Galatea come to life, and Pygmalion gave her his chisel. Remember? Lol.
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I don’t remember that much!Greek mythology hurts my brain, now.
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Oh, we mustn’t hurt your brain! Quick – think of beer!!
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I just remembered what it was that your post reminds me of! Rabbinic Judaism (I think,) has a legend that Armilius would be born from an, ahem, union between Bilyaal and a statue of a woman. I can’t make this up! Hm. I think I have new material, here…
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Your like button can be fixed: >My Site >Blog Posts…choose >Edit on one of your posts….scroll down til you see Likes & Shares on the left column.
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Wowsy! Wowsy! My girl does it again. Brilliant
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I only write for you and your gravatar! 😀 Thank you, Apollo… ❤
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I wasn’t the one that was going to break it to all the bloggers. Blush
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So many times we men descend to children (and not in the good way)
Thank you, Rose, fantastic new life to an old myth ☺
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Haha! That’s quite true, Francis; however, women do the same, but you’re right — it’s probably mostly men’s fault! Lol. I’m so glad you enjoyed my story! 🙂
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😀 well, usually women are more mature than us. In the case of men I always say that we mostly don’t mature but just turn into older kids XP
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I’ll admit I had to look up “Pygmalion,” having forgotten this as I have so many other things. It is easy to just toss in some allusion to classical myths in an attempt to add depth or gravitas. Yet you use Pygmalion so well, a perfect period to the story, all too common for us all. For me, it drove home the subtext of “You wouldn’t be here without me!” — how we fall into the trap of seeing the one we love not only our possession, but something (not someone) we have created, as if we one of the gods.
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Exactly! Well said as always….love all the effort you put into your comments. Thank you!
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You are welcome. And thank you.
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Excellent. A wonderful story. 😃
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Thank you, dark friend. 😊
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Aw, you found Pyg! Thanks T — perfect!! xo
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So it’s him then! Never heard of him! Thank you for the amazing learning I get from you!
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Oh, she’s a stony-hearted woman. I think she’ll come round in the end, though.
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She sure did! Lol.
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As you know, I love a happy ending. 🙂
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Brilliant piece P.R. It’s always the saddest stories that make for the most potent poetry ❤
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Yes, and you would know that, as well! Your bittersweet poems are one of the finest I’ve read. Thank you JT! 💋
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You are ever-welcome P.R ❤ Thank you !
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This one is surely my favorite EVER. As well done as your other works are, with this one, IMHO, you truly became a writer. It’s stunning.! Well worth being identified as your signature piece. You ought to be proud. (Insert ‘heart swelling with pride’ emoj here). Keep up the fine work. Along with the rest of your following, I await your next ‘masterpiece’.
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Thank you RF! I’m honored you’ve visited my blog and appreciate all the sweet words. ❤
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